English is not my first language
I’m Brazilian, so my first language is Portuguese. I learned English at a young age, and since most of the media I consume is in English, it quickly became a big part of my life. As an English teacher here in Brazil, I’ve spent years studying and teaching the language—so I’d say I know it pretty well.
I am constantly drawing inspiration from things around me
As I mentioned, most of the media I consume is originally in English —books, movies, songs… All of it, mostly because I love art and I love seeing the way people choose to express themselves.
I am a horrible driver, but an okay cook
Not that important, to be fair, but still, it makes me who I am so I will admit it. Though I’m legally allowed to drive, I avoid it for everyone’s safety—mine, my passengers’, and the innocent pedestrians just minding their business.
In the kitchen, I am less of a disaster. Not perfect, but not too awful. I am trying to improve, though, I promise. I can make a pretty mean chicken stroganoff if anyone is interested.
I love tea and cats
Much more important fact. I am a tea and a cat lover. Nothing beats the feeling of cozying up on a cold night with a cup of tea, a book in your hand and a cat in your lap – argue with the wall.
I am an Aries sun, Scorpio rising and Capricorn moon
Honestly, not much to say here. If you’re into astrology, this explains a lot. If not, sorry. Look it up.
I am chronically single
I am. 24 and still no dates, no kisses, no hand-holding… I don’t know what’s wrong in that department, because honestly… I’m a catch.
But anyway, it’s funny how I can be a hopeless romantic despite having zero real-life experience in the romance department. I just live my perfect little life with my perfect little dates in my messed up little head and who can blame for that?
This post is charming and gives off a warm, relatable, and witty vibe. It’s a great introduction to you as a person and a writer, offering readers a mix of humor, vulnerability, and personality. Here’s a breakdown of the impressions, suggestions, and closing statement considerations:
First Impressions and Vibes:
Relatability: The post feels down-to-earth and approachable. It creates a sense of connection by sharing quirks and personal details.
Humor: The self-deprecating humor is engaging and makes you seem likable and fun.
Authenticity: The tone feels genuine, which is perfect for drawing readers into your blog.
Creative Hook: The structure (“Top 5 things you need to know about me”) is simple and effective. It sets expectations and delivers variety.
Suggestions and Corrections:
1. General Suggestions:
Clarity: Some sentences could be streamlined for readability and flow.
Balance: While the humor is great, it’s good to balance it with a touch more about your goals as a writer or what readers can expect from your blog.
Transitions: Consider smoother transitions between points to make it flow more naturally.
2. Detailed Edits:
First Section:
Original:
“I’m Brazilian so my first language is actually Portuguese. However, I did learn English at a young age and most of the media I consume is in English, so… Also, I study the language a lot because I’m an English teacher here in my country so I guess I can say I know it pretty well.”
Suggested Edit:
“I’m Brazilian, so my first language is Portuguese. I learned English at a young age, and since most of the media I consume is in English, it quickly became a big part of my life. As an English teacher here in Brazil, I’ve spent years studying and teaching the language—so I’d say I know it pretty well.”
Second Section:
Original:
“As I’ve said, most of the media I consume is originally in English and when I say media, I mean books, movies, songs… All of it, mostly because I love art and I love seeing the way people choose to express themselves.”
Suggested Edit:
“As I mentioned, most of the media I consume—books, movies, songs—is originally in English. I’m drawn to art in all its forms, especially when it reveals how people choose to express themselves.”
Third Section:
Original:
“While legally authorized to drive, I refuse to, for the safety of everyone involved – myself, anyone in the car with me and anyone out and about minding their own business in the street.”
Suggested Edit:
“Though I’m legally allowed to drive, I avoid it for everyone’s safety—mine, my passengers’, and the innocent pedestrians just minding their business.”
Fourth Section:
Original:
“I can make a pretty mean chicken stroganoff is anyone is interested.”
Suggested Edit:
“I can make a pretty mean chicken stroganoff, if anyone’s interested.”
Fifth Section:
Original:
“But in all seriousness, it’s funny to me how, even without a single real experience in the romance department, I am a hopeless romantic.”
Suggested Edit:
“But in all seriousness, it’s funny how I can be a hopeless romantic despite having zero real-life experience in the romance department.”
Should You Add a Closing Statement?
Yes! A closing statement would help tie everything together and give readers a sense of purpose for the post. Something simple, like:
“So, that’s me in a nutshell! Stick around for more musings, humor, and (hopefully) updates on my journey as a writer. I’m excited to share this little corner of the internet with you!”
This gives the post a satisfying ending while encouraging readers to stay engaged.
Final Thoughts:
This is a great start for your blog—it’s funny, personable, and memorable. With a few tweaks for clarity and flow, it will make a strong first impression. Adding a closing statement would round it out nicely and set the tone for what’s to